雅思大作文批改实录.docx

雅思大作文批改实录尾段，而是检查，是自我批改和找他人批改，唯此写作才可精进。本文话题：个人努力有助环境保护题目Somepeoplethinkthattheenvironmentalproblemsaretoobigforindividualstosolve.Others,however,believethattheproblemscannotbesolvedifindividualsdonottakesomeactions.Discussbothviewsandgiveyourownopinion.学生习作Nowadays,thereisaheateddebateaboutwhetherindividualsshouldtakeactionstosolveenvironmentalproblems.Differentpeopleholddifferentopinions.InthefollowingpartIwillanalyzethesetwodivergentideasindetailandgivemyownopinion.Somepeoplethinkthattheenvironmentalproblemsaretoobigforindividualstosolve.Individualscandonothingtoimprovetheenvironment.Onlygovernmentandlargecompaniescanmakeadifference.Incontrast,othersholddifferentopinionthateachindividualshouldtakesomeactionsotherwisetheproblemscannotbesolved.Individualactions,smallastheymaybe,canberenderedmuchmoreusefulthanwerealize.AsfarasI’mconcerned,botharenotcompletelyobjectiveandIagreewiththesetwoinsomeextend.Asweallknow,ourenvironmentisfacingalargenumberofproblemswhichneedtobedealtwithimmediately.Undoubtedly,governmentsandlargecompaniesshouldtaketheresponsibilitytosolveit.What'smore,someissuesevenneedjointinternationaleffortamongdifferentboundaries.However,doesthismeanthatindividualsdon'thaveanyresponsibility?Althoughthereishugedifficultyinsolvingsomeenvironmentalproblemsforindividuals,Idon'tthinkitshouldbeanexcusefortakingnoaction.Actually,individualscandomanysmallbutpowerfulthingstohelptoimprovetheenvironment,suchasgarbagesortingbeforethrowaway,refusingtousedisposablechopsticksandsoon.Environmentprotectisnotsuchabigissuethatindividualscandonothing.Itisverypracticalanditneedseachpersontotakesomeactions.Toputitintoanutshell,protectingenvironmentandsolvingrelatedproblemsneedjointeffortofbothgovernmentsandindividuals.Everyoneshouldbeawareofitsimportance,bearesponsibleoneandtakesomepracticalactionstodealwithit.Onlyinthiswaycanenvironmentalproblemsbeensolvedassoonaspossible.评分：6老雅评改本题问：解决环境问题，个人到底能否起作用?有人说，个人不起作用，因为环保问题太大;其他人则说，没有个人，环境问题根本不可能得到解决。显然，这里应该将环境问题分类，一类是需要政府乃至国际合作才能解决，