雅思写作开头的失败案例.docx

雅思写作开头的失败案例雅思写作开头的失败案例“见官死”开头之一：主题表达不清晰典型失败案例：Topic1-Shouldcollegestudentsbeallowedtogetmarried?Thistopicisveryinteresting.I’mveryinterestedintalkingaboutthistopic.BecauseI’malsoacollegestudentandI’mnotmarried……修改方案：开门见山直奔主题Inmyopinion,itwouldnotbeawisedecisiontoallowcollegestudentstogetmarried。Topic2-Willmoderntechnology,suchastheInternet,everreplacethebookorthewritingwordasthesolesourceofinformation?(雅思真题)Ok,thistopicisaverygoodtopic.First,letmetellyouastory:Ihaveafriend,helikesgoontheinternetverymuch.Everyday,heusesinternettoreadnewsorplayinternetgames.Sowecanseetheinternetismoreandmoreimportantinourdailylife.Topic3-TheimportanceofenvironmentalprotectionOh,thistopicissurelyveryimportant.Isn’tit?Ofcourse!It’sreallyveryveryimportant!“见官死”开头之二：中式英文人见人晕典型失败案例：Topic1-ThehappiestmomentinyourlifeInourlife,therearealwayssomemomentswhichmakeyourheartfloweropenedangrily……Topic2-ThepopulationproblemThepopulationproblemisaverybigproblem.Forexample,inthecitycentersofShanghai,wecanalwaysseepeoplemountainpeopleseathere.Topic3-Istherefairnessintoday’sbusinessworld?Ithinkintoday’ssociety,thereisnofairnessinthebusinessworld.Forexample,IalwayschoppedwhenIgooutbuythings……Topic4-TheadvantageofbeinganicepersonBeinganicepersonhavemanyadvantage.Ibelieveifapeoplealwaysdobadthings,hewillget“baoying”.“见官死”开头之三：观点模糊态度暧昧典型失败案例：Topic-Shouldcollegestudentsbeallowedtogetmarried?Ithinkthistopicisveryhardtosay.BecauseIamstillverylittle,only17,andnotmarried,sothistopicisverydifficultforme……“见官死”开头之四：偏离主题无轨电车典型失败案例：Topic-Itissaidthatnowadaysonecannotacquirethequalificationsandqualityessentialtosuccessthroughuniversityeducation.Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagreewiththestatement?(雅思真题)Ithinktosuccess,wemusthavealotofimportantqualities.Tohavetheseimportantqualities,wemustlearnalotofthings,forexample,English,musictools,andetc.Wecanlearnthesequalitiesfromourteachers,ourfriendsandfrombooks.Allinall,wecanlearnfrommanyplaces.“见官死”开头之五：语法错误惨不忍睹典型失败案例：Topic-Ifchildrenbehavebadly,shouldtheirparentsacceptrespons