六级写作经典范文及点评-欲望.docx

六级写作经典范文及点评:欲望欲望与生俱来，人人都有。它可以催人上进，使人奋起，创造事业辉煌；也可以使人得陇望蜀，永不满足，最终陷于痛苦。如何看待，如何运用，不同人的心中有一杆不同的秤…AppetiteOneofthemajorpleasuresinlifeisappetite,andoneofourmajordutiesshouldbetopreserveit.Appetiteisthekeennessofliving:itisoneofthesensesthattellsyouthatyouarestillcurioustoexist,thatyoustillhaveanedgeonyourlongingsandwanttobiteintotheworldandtasteitsnumerousflavorsandjuices.Byappetite,ofcourse,Idon’tmeanjustthedesireforfood,butanyconditionofunsatisfieddesire,anyburninginthebloodthatprovesyouwantmorethanyou’vegot,andthatyouhaven’tusedupyourlife.Wildesaidhefeltsorryforthosewhonevergottheirheart’sdesire,butsorrierstillforthosewhodid.Forappetite,forme,isthisstateofwanting,whichkeepsone’sexpectationsalive.Irememberlearningthislessonlongagoasachild,whentreatsandindulgencewerefew,andwhenIdiscoveredthatthegreatestpitchhappinesswasnotinactuallyeatingatoffeebutingazingatitbeforehand.True,thefirstbitewasdelicious,butoncethetoffeewasgoneonewasleftwithnothing,neithertoffeenorlust.Besides,thewholetoffeenessoftoffeeswasimperceptiblydiminishedbythegrossactofhavingeatingit.No,thebestwasinwantingit,insittingandlookingatit,whenonetastedanendlesstreasurehouseofflavors.So,forme,oneofthekeenestpleasuresofappetiteremainsinthewanting,notthesatisfaction.Inwantingapeach,orawhisky,oraparticulartextureorsound,ortobewithaparticularfriend,forinthosecondition,ofcourse,Iknowthattheobjectofdesireisalwaysatitsmostflawlesslyperfect.Forthatmatter,Idon’twantthreesquaremealsaday—Iwantonehuge,delicious,orgiastic,tablegroaningblowout,sayeveryfourdays,andthennotbetoosurewherethenextoneiscomingfrom①.Adayoffastingisnotformejustadevicefordenyingoneselfapleasure,butratherawayofanticipatingararermomentofsupremeenjoyment.［360words］行文点评作者开篇点题，指出Oneofthemajorpleasuresinlifeisappetite。进而作者给appetite下了一个定义，即对任何事物的渴望。接着用王尔德的话引出作者的观点：Appetiteisthestateofwanting。在第二段中，作者用Iremember...讲述了自己吃太妃糖的亲身经历，描述生动形象，贴近生活，由这段经历作者引出了文章的主题——欲望最大的乐趣在于对之渴求，而非满足。作者谈的是食欲(appetite)，却又不仅仅谈对食物的热望。作者由小见大，由食欲谈及欲望(desire)，及其满足(satisfaction)。文章充满智慧(wits